Chat Thread 19: In the Beginning Was the Chat

....at 11:30 PM?

yup. ^^

it's an excellent evening drink.

Caffeine and alcohol... Yes, I suppose it is if you're planning to pull an all-nighter.

*kicks a pebble*

*which causes a rock slide*
*which crushes a van carrying hazardous materials*
*which pours into a lake*
*which poisons the fish*
*which become bloodthirsty mutants and ravage a nearby town*

*makes popcorn to watch the carnage*

of course you would.

*tosses Payne into the fray for his insolence*

*cooks mutant fish for dinner*

*laughs as it gives you intestinal distress*

*pelts Jorg with dung*

So, I should hopefully be finished adding in all the additional content to my book this weekend. Is there anything you can think of that you would have liked to have seen in there?

a conclusion :V

There was a conclusion. >>

i believe we've had this discuss where the end of the story felt more like the "end" of a TV episode than it did as the end of a book.

Yes, you said as much. You failed to offer any solutions to this perceived flaw, however.

well the problem you have is simple

A story follows these main steps

Introduction. Build Up. Climax. Conclusion.

what you have is

Introduction. Build Up. Climax. Introduction.

I fail to see how them all agreeing to form a team is an introduction. That can certainly be at the beginning of some stories, but that's not an unusual ending for stories about learning to trust and rely on others. 

Perhaps a more concrete example would help. How exactly would you have ended it?

the introduction because not only did you not put any relevance in the resolution of events. (Stuff happened, serious stuff was temporarelly resolved, characters plan stuff for the future instead of comming into realisation that something was done.) AND to add in to that, you have characters being introduced, at the end.

No relevance? I don't see how that's true. Choosing Jessie and Ciel was the final step in his decision to keep hiding in the lie, the Devil, or move into the truth, the Lovers. I suppose they could have discussed what just happened back in the coven's lair in more detail. But they did state their resolution coming out of it. 

If you're talking about Theo and Gavin, I should probably reframe that as an epilogue. The scene with the trio is the conclusion. The one with the witch hunting duo is more of a teaserffor what's to come.

*pounces on Jorg and covers his cheek in kisses*

Oh, Jorg, you're always pushing me to do my best. And this has just given me the perfect idea for how to end things.

glad to be of help

That was a more muted response than I was expecting lol. 

I'm super pumped now though. This week has been a deluge of good scene ideas for me.

it's the end of the day, I'm tired

*tucks you into bed*

good night jorg, and congratz on getting that mask off Carmilla

i myself managed to roll a Stheno, so once Euryale comes out, i`ll definitively use a Gorgon party.