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PostSubject: [Web Story] Invisible War: The Five to Change, The Five to Aid   Thu May 01, 2014 11:57 am

~The Prologue~

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~Chapter One : The Poem, Part I~

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~Chapter 2: Poem, Part II~ 


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~Chapter 3: The Invisible War~

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~Chapter 4: The First Disaster~

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~Chapter 5: Awaken Black Knight~

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~Chapter 6: The Forbidden Girl~

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~Chapter 7: The Kiss(The work in progress)~

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Will Translate more later


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PostSubject: Re: [Web Story] Invisible War: The Five to Change, The Five to Aid   Thu May 01, 2014 1:12 pm

A win win win. I can easily see it adapted into an anime or live action movie
I hope you have more. unlike the majority of my works, which I still need to restart, after leaving them with only their prologues or first chapters.
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PostSubject: Re: [Web Story] Invisible War: The Five to Change, The Five to Aid   Thu May 01, 2014 3:21 pm

I do, I just need to translate in English  
And thanks for the compliment. I wish it was pleasant reading.
Well then, I hope to read yours soon
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PostSubject: Re: [Web Story] Invisible War: The Five to Change, The Five to Aid   Sun May 04, 2014 10:24 am

Updated to Chapter 2, and will work on Chapter 3

Please do comment, it helps
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PostSubject: Re: [Web Story] Invisible War: The Five to Change, The Five to Aid   Sun May 04, 2014 12:43 pm

hahaha
loved how the chapter ended at that point

it really did hook me in. definitely something i would buy if i got to read this far.

it is quite interesting thus far. I cant complain about the grammar as i get that it is after all a translated work and English grammar may not be a strength of yours but still its a great read.

i didn't catch on what happened at the cafeteria {the grabbing of his legs} but probably it might be explained later on.. or not. either ways it was fun.

I liked how she keeps addressing him as Soo Ho Sunbae and not by his American moniker
If I understood correctly, "Sunbae" is the Japanese equivalent of "Senpai"

whih could mean that Hyun Jung is not someone from his class but rather his junior.
though sometimes I've noticed the word Senpai being used as into address someone who may be more knowledgeable or experienced thn oneself, even when both persons may be of the same age and or school class level.

but I'm sure her status would be revealed later on.
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PostSubject: Re: [Web Story] Invisible War: The Five to Change, The Five to Aid   Sun May 04, 2014 3:18 pm

Ah yes, I realized there would be grammar mistakes as I try to translate it into English and it seems some escaped me completely

Will do proof reading after I finish my translation in chapter 4
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PostSubject: Re: [Web Story] Invisible War: The Five to Change, The Five to Aid   Tue May 06, 2014 5:45 am

Chapter 3 updated

Now working on chapter 4
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PostSubject: Re: [Web Story] Invisible War: The Five to Change, The Five to Aid   Sun May 11, 2014 11:49 pm

Finished Chapter four

Now for little proof reading, and will update Chapter 5

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PostSubject: Re: [Web Story] Invisible War: The Five to Change, The Five to Aid   Mon May 12, 2014 6:31 pm

*comments* awesome story Nex O:
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PostSubject: Re: [Web Story] Invisible War: The Five to Change, The Five to Aid   Tue May 27, 2014 11:27 am

Spiriter wrote:
*comments* awesome story Nex O:

Why, thank you, Spirit XD

Well I will be translating more chapters after June 6th or so

Until then, people, pls do comment and give me some feedback

Well proof reading has to wait sadly

But I will do it someday

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PostSubject: Re: [Web Story] Invisible War: The Five to Change, The Five to Aid   Sat Jun 14, 2014 6:29 am

finally done with 5th chapter
Will work on six
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PostSubject: Re: [Web Story] Invisible War: The Five to Change, The Five to Aid   Sun Jun 21, 2015 2:41 pm

completed chapter 6

Working on chapter 7

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