Fate / Arcana OOC

I've got about an hour and a half left here at the coffee shop before I have to head home.
Hopefully, I'll get through chapter 16 or so before then.

Oh cool. :0

Well, those are obviously typos where I missed a key a reversed the order, etc.

And content? No new thoughts on the story or development or pacing or anything?

Yeah, for the most part, that seems to be the case. I've not really found any places where entire sentences seem strange this time, although I'll admit that I'm not reading it as slowly and meticulously as I did the first time through.

The content and pacing hasn't changed enough from my first time reading it through for me to really change my previous opinions, but I do admit that I find the story more appealing when I'm not concentrating on the organization and just focusing on the actual content.

The only thing I saw out of place so far was the fact that you included both Aiden's and the principal's point of view in chapter 1. I was under the assumption that you were completely writing the principal's viewpoint out from a previous discussion.

Oh, oops. Yes, the principal pov is being cut. I think Aiden's pov comes across as a little more inviting.

I'm not sure I'd call it more inviting, considering the dark thoughts at the time, but it's definitely more coherent with the rest of the story.

Agreed. Well, I think it's more accessible. His personality is intact, but he's not so off-putting as sitting stone-faced through the whole first scene. Plus, yeah, it seems more in-tone with the rest of the book.

packing up now. I sent you what I got done with. (think it was roughly half the book in total)

hopefully, I'll have another day like this next week, and I can finish it then.

So 'tonight' turned out to be 'tomorrow', but hey, Elaina and Henry posts now up!

Sounds good. Thanks. :0

Oh, Henry lol. He's more out of his element than Lily.

Payne! >:0

yeah, I'll post tonight. :/

thought jorg might post first, but I guess not.

i'll post tomorrow

Slackers.

posted. D:

Posted. :0

I like the little nod to Odysseus.

I figured you'd catch that. XD

Somehow, I don't always get the new post notification for this thread.

yeah, I've been having that happen occasionally too. :/
but it's just the OOC, and as soon as I open up the thread itself, all the notifications show up at the top.

Odd.

So, any chance to read more? I sent out more letters this weekend.

not yet.
prolly gonna aim for spending Wednesday at the coffee shop.

Mkay. :0

How's everything going?

pretty good on my end.
still trying to clean up the basement, but we're actually making some progress now.

gonna have to rip out a shower next week and install a new one.
(pipes are leaking)

Why all this sudden renovation?

the house is 30 years old. XD
things are starting to need fixing.

the shower has actually been leaking for over a month now, but this week is gonna be the first chance we've had to fix it.

I can't tell if you guys are just cheap or very hands-on, cause I wouldn't try to fix piping.